Tuesday, March 6, 2012

Ode to a Guardian


                I tend to be a wordy-writer, so I am attempting poetry to tell a story, but without over-telling. I would definitely appreciate some writing tips for poetry.

Ode to a Guardian

Sixteen, yippee!
Driver is me

Two days later
High school finals

Patch of ice
Through a fence
Knocking on a lady’s back door

What a mess
Done with tests
Message from Mom
“Call me”

“Wait at home
Officer  Ticket will come
Wanted to pull you from school
I told him NO”

No judgment from her
Such strength to say no

My Guardian Angel

Since I was born

2 comments:

  1. I love that you attempted a new genre and with such splendor! The formate was just another way to add uniqueness to your piece. I am no poet, wordy am I, no advice here... maybe I will give it a try!

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  2. I love it! The snippets are like freeze frames of the story. Similar to an old fashioned movie, the gaps were filled in by my mind effortlessly. You are amazing!

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